Jasmine Hart

Poem Seven Time of Day Morning, mourning, all the same. I've lost my tongue to this refrain. Or tastebuds, rather,all too bland to open mouths or coax a hand to ...

"Cut" Hi Navita, It's good to read you again. This is really wonderful. It flows perfectly, I love the effect of the stanzas and your use of half-rhyme to create ...

Poem Six Cobwebs The cobwebs are torn by the broom, wasted effort to dispell gloom. Their wasted time, threading the loom... complete destruction, silent doom. It should have brightened up ...

Hey Kit, "Heaven for Sale" Opens well. I'd change "to their" to "of their", and shorten the last line of the first stanza. Maybe "Rubble beneath a hefty asking price"? ...

I've only read your latest, so I can't tell if they're getting worse, but if they are I need to go back and read from the start because I really ...

I love this. "Summer" is my favorite. I especially enjoyed: "When I was fourteen, my grandmother taught me how to bake, the lemon became our fruit." Beautiful.

Poem Five: Free Verse Tulip Taken from the pot on the left in the front garden. Purple as a new bruise - a good one not a pathetic yellow where-did-I ...

"Conversations with Ophelia" Hi bubbles, The first line really drew me in and I think that the dash and the skipped line after "Listen" work really well. I think "like ...

Thank you so much.

Poem Four: Shakespearean Sonnet Sweet-pea *submitting*

Poem Three: Terza Rima Please Please believe that I would if I thought myself able, but the daffodils are already turning brown, and the stars aren't looking all too stable... ...

Poem One: Pantoum:Calandiva/Flaming Katy No desert for you, Calandiva. You'll live on the sill with a view of the lake, which will soften your ultra-pink cat-tongue flames. To soften, I ...

Hi Lilicia, You have some nice imagery here. I really liked; "Crushing the drunken bluebells." I'd change "with" in the first stanza to"at" as I think it sounds better. I'd ...

Hi, This flows smoothly and the final stanza in particular is very beautiful. I'd put a comma after "use" and "me". I'd try adding more concrete imagery. Turn it outwards ...

Hi, I disagree. You are not a horrible poet. The imagery in the first stanza was great, and the tone of; "I just want to know. Am I dead already?" ...